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I once sat in puddles on swings,
uncaring of dirty marks left: blue
trousers, black; pink skirts, purple;
white dresses -- no, I didn't wear
white.
         I wanted to.
                           I clambered
over red-brick walls, rot-green
fences and cold-cut metal poles.

It was then I saw her: brunette locks
tamed by brush and comb and ribbon,
plaited to her waist and back.
                                           "Pretty little loopy!"
I yelled to mother, leant against the gate, lips
parted in discontent as I
fell from my perch, overcome by admiration:
whispy strands swayed,                       free of red
ribbons and glitter hair clasps, softly striking
                                         her white dress.   
©2007-2009 ~crazynloveless
:iconcrazynloveless:

Author's Comments

This is my January 26 ~Write-Off piece!

FINALLY! I am back in the game! I have defeated - at least temporarily - the monster known as song writing. MUAHAHA. Fear me. Yes, fear me. You know you want to! I am sorry for being gone so long, I hope you like this'n!

I have submitted it here as well as at [link] because of ~StoneAnnexCipher's response.

Enjoy! :)

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:iconstoneannexcipher:
lololol, srs.

This is one amazing pome.
:iconcrazynloveless:
MAN. Thank you... :faint:

Honestly, I'm not sure I can tell you how cool it is to get a fave/comment/reaction like that from you. Mr. Big Scary Poet guy. XD

--
AKA ~007-crazynloveless

take off your -3 armour of "frigid bitch" and ill give you my +4 "phallace of mount doom" baby ;) Sto67 "Lol. You make baby Jesus cry." Miguel
:icondothedrew57:
hes right this is really really good
:iconcrazynloveless:
Thanks, Andrew. Glad you think so. :D

--
AKA ~007-crazynloveless

take off your -3 armour of "frigid bitch" and ill give you my +4 "phallace of mount doom" baby ;) Sto67 "Lol. You make baby Jesus cry." Miguel
:iconninebrightshiners:
This is quite good ^^;

--
Venomous voice tempts me, drains me, bleeds me, leaves me cracked and empty
drags me down like some sweet gravity.
:iconcrazynloveless:
Hehe, thank you very much. :D

--
AKA ~007-crazynloveless

take off your -3 armour of "frigid bitch" and ill give you my +4 "phallace of mount doom" baby ;) Sto67 "Lol. You make baby Jesus cry." Miguel
:icondothedrew57:
you know ive always loved your work
:iconbolddog:
wow great poem!!

--
the prettiest of things can be so subtle and small, its easy to pass them by, or let them go:invisible:

some memories are too precious to remember, others to horrific to forget, no matter how had we try
:iconcrazynloveless:
Thankies. :D

--
AKA ~007-crazynloveless

take off your -3 armour of "frigid bitch" and ill give you my +4 "phallace of mount doom" baby ;) Sto67 "Lol. You make baby Jesus cry." Miguel
:iconscorpiowaterangel:
Lol.

That IS kick-ass! XD

--
'Everything is us, and we are everything, but what good is this, is everything is nothing?'

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